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RE: draft-shafer-netconf-syslog-00.txt - NITs
A few editorial NITs for you to consider in the next revision.
While reading I noticed (sect 3.1.2.1):
<priority facility="kern" level="debug"/>
whereas on page 7 I see:
o "kernel" -- Messages generated by the kernel
so should it be:
<priority facility="kernel" level="debug"/>
so that they are in sync?
There is another occurrence on page 11.
and also (again in section 3.1.2.1):
<parameter>peer=10.1.2.3</parameter>
And I guess that that represents and ip-address?
If so, I suggest to use an address aka RFC3330 in the range 192.0.2.0/24
This will avoid a possible later comment/discuss at IESG level.
Possibly (on page 11):
<parameter>peer=10.*</parameter>
also is net 10? and so maybe it is then better to do 192.* ??
Further, I do not think that RFC1157 is a normative reference.
At least I would make it informative. But even if you do,
maybe it is better to use RFC3410.
Bert
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