WG last call comments on draft-ietf-ccamp-ospf-interas-te-extension-02.txt

["Adrian Farrel" <adrian@olddog.co.uk>]

Hi,

Here are a few very minor review comments.
It is probable that similar comments apply to the ISIS draft. Can you check?

Thanks,
Adrian
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Header
s/Network work group/Network working group/
Please show names as "M. Chen"
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Abstract
s/Engineering(TE)/Engineering (TE)/
s/information from other outside the AS/information from outside the AS/
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OSPFv3-TE
I am currently trying to close an issue down with the OSPF WG chairs and the 
ADs.
Your I-D includes extensions to OSPFv3-TE as requested by the OSPF working 
group.
This means that you are correct to have the OSPFv3-TE draft as a Normative 
reference.
However, the OSPFv3-TE draft is stalled in the OSPF working group where:
- the draft has just expired
- there is more than one implementation
- there are no known deployments
- no interop testing has been done
This means that the OSPFv3-TE draft might not advance for some time and 
might leave your draft stalled in the RFC Editor queue.
I will update the working group as we make progress on this issue.
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Section 2.1
s/excluded.:/excluded:/
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Section 2.2
s/PATH/Path/ x2
s/Section 4.0/Section 4./
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Section 2.3
s/TE link is particular/TE link is particularly/
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Section 3.1.1
s/network-wide policy choice/AS-wide policy choice/
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Section 3.2
s/Both/Both the/
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Sections 3.3.1, 3.3.2, and 3.3.3
Please include a forward reference to Section 6.2 when you discuss the TLV 
type assignment and mention IANA.
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Section 4
s/link , the ASBR/link, the ASBR/
s/consequently , an/consequently, an/
s/considering here(i.e.,/considering here (i.e.,/
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Section 6.1
Please separate the OSPFv2 and OSPFv3 assignments into separate paragraphs 
(or sections).
Please reference the IANA registries by name "Opaque Link-State 
Advertisements (LSA) Option Types" for OSPFv2, and "Open Shortest Path First 
v3 (OSPFv3) Parameters" with sub-registry "OSPFv3 LSA Function Codes" for 
OSPFv3.
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Section 8.2
[PD-PATH] is now RFC 5152
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