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Chair review of draft-ietf-ccamp-inter-domain-rsvp-te-04.txt
Hi,
Here's my review of
this I-D to help the authors prepare it for WG last call. In my opinion, the
draft is almost ready except for a few minor items and editorials. I encourage
the WG to also post any items at this time, so as to allow the
authors to efficiently update. If the authors can submit a new version
addressing the comments, we can take the I-D forward.
Thanks,
Deborah
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Boilerplate
Need the new
boilerplate
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Nits: may want to
check, a couple of nits on weird spacings and line lengths
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Section
1
Update for recent
work, e.g. [INTER-DOMAIN-FRAMEWORK] is RFC4726, RFC4726 applies for MPLS-TE and
GMPLS, requirements for GMPLS are in
draft-otani-ccamp-interas-gmpls-te-05.txt.
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Section
2
text has
"supported
by one of three options"
May want to also
mention 4726's hybrid support, probably a small note is all that's needed, e.g.
"(or hybrid)". Also, it would be useful to mention something on consideration
for 4726's backward compatibility, either here or in a later
section.
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Section
3
item 2 incomplete
sentence, a suggestion:
s/adhered
to./adhered./
also in item
2
s/message an error
code/message with error code/
item
3
s/in the Section
3/in Section 3/
item
4
s/option is
supplied/option is specified/
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Section
3.2
s/information that
report/information that reports/
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Section
5.1.2
s/(filed
link)/(failed link)/
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Section
5.1.3
s/domian/domain/
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Section
6
s/preferable/more
preferred/
s/in order search/in
order to search/
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Section
7
s/:-/:/
the text says
"disallow or ignore hops", I don't think its "ignore"?
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[LOOSE-REOPT] is now
[RFC4736], and Informational, did you want to reference as a
Normative Reference?
Check and update
others.
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Section
11
JP's email address
is up-to-date?