Issue: Editorial comments on 3576 server MIB

["Greg Weber \(gdweber\)" <gdweber@cisco.com>]

Description of issue: Editorial comments on 3576 server MIB
Submitter name: Greg Weber
Submitter email address: gdweber@cisco.com
Date first submitted: June 5th, 2005
Reference: n/a
Document: draft-ietf-radext-dynauth-server-mib-00.txt
Comment type: E
Priority: 1
Section: various
Rationale/Explanation of issue: Editorial pass

Requested changes:

Section 2
  "[RFC3576] ." -> "[RFC3576]."
Section 5
  Figure 1: "user 2" -> "User 2"
  #2: "that the DAS shares a secret with." ->
      "with which the DAS shares a secret."
Section 6
  radiusDynAuthServerMIB DESCRIPTION:
    "Remote Access Dialin User Service" ->
    "Remote Authentication Dial In User Service"
  radiusDynAuthServDisconUserSessRemoved DESCRIPTION:
    "In the case this Dynamic Autorization Server has no 
     knowledge on..." ->
    "In the case that this Dynamic Authorization Server 
     has no knowledge of..."
  radiusDynAuthServDisconBadAuthenticators DESCRIPTION:
    "which contained invalid Signature attributes" ->
    "which contained an invalid Request Authenticator"
  radiusDynAuthServCoAUserSessChanged DESCRIPTION:
    "Cient" -> "Client"
    "multiple user sessions authorization ->
      "multiple user sessions' authorization" 
    "In the case this Dynamic Autorization Server has 
     no knowledge on" ->
      "In the case that this Dynamic Authorization Server
       has no knowledge of"
  radiusDynAuthServCoABadAuthenticators DESCRIPTION:
    "which contained invalid Signature attributes" ->
    "which contained an invalid Request Authenticator"
  radiusDynAuthServCoAPacketsDropped DESCRIPTION:
    "clisdfauthenticators" -> "authenticators"
Section 10
  [DYNCLNT]: "Auhtorization" -> "Authorization"

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